POETIC PEBBLES

Twinkle, twinkle the pin-ups shine
Like diamonds in glittering glories
Pebbles and sand, stars and sky
The outer reflecting the inner world
As above, so below, the cliché goes
An image in the mirror mimics
While the shadow follows suit
Molecular matter reduced to atoms
Broken composites of the indestructible
Electrons, neutrons and protons
Vibratory in natural spiritual state
A foundation of structural universe
Parchments in free and made-up forms
Like pebble and stars in comparison
The mind assigns it dimensions

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Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

Comments

Candlewitch

13 years 6 months ago

Hello,

I like the title and the content. Very deep!

"As above, so below, the cliché goes"

not a cliche' at all. but an old Wiccan saying.

always, Cat

t. reflexion

13 years 6 months ago

Thanks

I see the poems posted on neopoet screen as pebbles, stars and valuables with their origins in the mind of man, "As above, so below". The use of the word cliche in this context is in noting that the term has been in use long ago and the origin is buried in antiquities. Best wishes