Poetry Spin and Spun

I write poetry to abort
Tell readers what others shun
The scripts however long or short
I attempt to spin and spun
For creative writing fun

Whether its good or not, I won't say
I'll leave it for critiquing sake

About This Poem

Last Few Words: ababbcc rhymed

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Comments

Nordic cloud

13 years 3 months ago

My scripts maybe?

I love the title its got such a spin on it,
spin and spun and life's begun to ...I'll stop but the impetus took me on.

I think after the scripts could be a comma, or a new line.
I don't think you mean the judgement day in here, the other poets judging you,
as to the other one, it might be a bit late to have any use for the judgement :)

Spun fun this it would be fun if it went on,
and also if it were shorter, it is great fun just as it is too Barbara,
you will get us smiling I know it.

Ann.

Barbara Writes

13 years 3 months ago

thanks Ann

I made a couple of changes.
I'm still thinking on a better word than judgment

weirdelf

13 years 3 months ago

Poetry is an extreme sport!

but sport implies competition, so I challenge the precept.

Tell readers what others shun
great line!

judgement day? Is that right now when we crit you? Or is it the test of time?

Despite my quibbles, Ilike the poem.

Barbara Writes

13 years 3 months ago

Jess

Glad to have you commenting on my work. Glad you like it. And judgement was pending more meaning from me. Your comment have helped me see what i was searching for in this one word to clarify it better. I always appreciated your quibbles

weirdelf

13 years 3 months ago

I like the revisions!

brave.

Barbara Writes

13 years 3 months ago

Jess

Glad you like. I think is sound better and ring the tone much smoother.