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S
scribbler
May 17, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

POET'S HANDS

These are hardly poet's hands
far too scarred and gnarled with age
with skin as dry as desert sands
yet they still scribble on this page

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I have come to find out that I'm not the first to use the label "Rhyku" in describing a particular form of poetry. since the other poet's use precedes mine I'm going to delete my use of Rhyku in describing this form.........stan PS there are absolutely no hard feelings between me and the other poet, this is just the right thing to do

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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mand

mand

14 years 2 months ago

Hi Stan

I haven't seen a rhyku before. You've donw a good job - does there have to be a syllable count? I see it rhymes is that another feature? It's good to read your work

Thanks for sharing Stan.

Love Mand xxxxxxx

P.s typo ( I think ). should it be = far too scarred "and" gnarled with age?

S

scribbler

14 years 2 months ago

hi mand

Rhyku: a rhyming Haiku. Rules are pretty simple. 1.minimum of 3 lines, maximum of 4. 2.at least 2 lines must rhyme,doesn't matter which 2. 3. no line can contain more than seven words. I came up with this form to allow those who prefer rhyme an outlet to write in a defined compact form with more freedom than allowed in many Japanese styles. Hope to see you give it a try.................stan

S

scribbler

14 years 2 months ago

hi

I DO tend toward narrative poetry I guess. And often need a fort to hide behind lol.......stan

K

Kailashana2

14 years 2 months ago

lol.

lol.

however, to folks such as myself, perhaps there's a tendency to circle around the fort, playing cowgirls and what-have-yous.

~A

S

scribbler

14 years 2 months ago

lol

cowboys and Native American Indigenus Inhabitants doesn't have quite the same ring does it?

S

scribbler

14 years 2 months ago

hi Rose

Check reply to mand above as to style. I made it pretty simple in rules to make it easier to use. You should give it a shot............stan

M

magics02

14 years 2 months ago

Great

I liked everything about it as it spoke about you and I liked the scribbled on the page part. Good job there Stan. I am liking your new writes and see you are experiencing with them. Keep up the good works my friend

Mona
xox

S

scribbler

14 years 2 months ago

hi Mona

I came up with this on old site where I tried a Haiku and was informed rhyming was not allowed in Haiku. Also thought it might be a good way to post a write consisting of very short form. I know there are many times I come up with a great 1st verse then hit a brick wall. This is also a good way to decrease "orphaned " unfinished writes...............stan

Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

14 years 2 months ago

I love this Stan

Now I know what a Rhyku is too,
I have mostly studied the Haïku
as they are so beautifully concise,
like one petal falling into my lap.

But I enjoyed yours here. Thank you. Love Ann

S

scribbler

14 years 2 months ago

hello

Thank you and I'm glad you liked this...............stan

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

8 years ago

dear Stan,

you definitely have a poet's hands... it is obvious from all your works!

*hugs, Cat

S

scribbler

8 years ago

Hi Cat

I count all the scars on these hands and not a single one came from a pen lol. (perhaps that should tell me something about career choice.......appreciate your visit.........stan