mand

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A Portrait Of My Love

My friend, fair of face
A gentle smile, full of grace
Lips that blow a kiss of charm
Smeared with fragrant healing balm.

My love, coyly sighs,
Rosy cheeks and deep blue eyes
Beauteous and quick to please
Melting me with quiet ease.

My bride, raven hair
Draped around her shoulders bare
Brushed with hands of ivory
Softly tied with purity.

My mate, ample breast
Clothed in linen, cotton dressed
Skin as pale as satin moth
Underneath the flimsy cloth.

My life evermore,
Lived with one that I adore
Forever in her caress
Filled with joy and happiness

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: GBR

Comments

mand

14 years 2 months ago

Hi Shirl

Always good to have you come by. I'm glad you liked it - I won't delete this one. Lol

Thanks for reading and commenting Shirl.

Loads of love and hugs

Mand xxxxxxxx

raj

14 years 2 months ago

Dearest Mand

this write flows as smooth as silk creating beautiful portraits with consummate ease..a pleasure read for me...

much love...

mand

14 years 2 months ago

Hi Raj

Good to hear from you. Glad you liked it.

Kind of you to read and comment.

Loads of love

Mand xxxxxxxx

scribbler

14 years 2 months ago

hello

enjoyable statement of love. Why leave out comma in 1st line of last stanza?.......................stan

mand

14 years 2 months ago

Hellooo Stan the man

Nice to see you. Thanks for the correction always glad to hear from you.

Love Mand xxxxxx

mand

14 years 2 months ago

Hi Xena

Great to hear gyou. I hope you're o.k. Thank you for reading and commenting, much appreciated.

Love Mand xxxxxxxxxxx

Nordic cloud

14 years 2 months ago

Sweet blush of rose

Sweet blush of rose
the moth its gentle touch
this poem says that much
a love so transparent
delicate like gossamer
upon the grass in dew,
you sensed a pastel view
of sentiment
so lovely too.

Dear Mand.
from Ann.

mand

14 years 2 months ago

Hi Ann

Woow! I love your comment. ( poem ). Your knowledge of words amazes me!! "delicate like gossamer upon the grass of dew". Fabulous! You should be famous - you are inspiring and inspire. Love your words Ann of Norway.

Love Mand xxxxx

Psyve

14 years 2 months ago

Mand

A gentle poem, but well constructed.
I like the quiet regimen upon which you have built this:
the discipline is apparent in the opening lines of each verse.
Yet, the overriding feeling is one of gentle warmth.
I enjoyed this read.
Psyve

mand

14 years 2 months ago

Hi Psyve

Thank you Psyve, I don't know what to say except thank you for your lovely encouraging comment!

I have a great big smile on my face!!

Loads of love

Mand xxxxxx