Postmodern yellow brick road

Love the reference to the Wizard of Oz, especially the first two lines, effective contrast of innocence and theme. I think each Stanza fits the theme perfectly and has a consistent metre.

Lou

I get the first verse, almost verse. But.... You think others fear you? Or you want them to fear you? I am unsure of why you have your line breaks the way you do? And your referances to others with labels, but then talking about yourself. I am not feeling this. Or understanding it. Sorry. Can you explain Jess?

This is hilarious...

One would have thought there would be no explanations necessary with a reference to something that probably the majority of Americans would easily recognize. Nor your *take*, knowing you.

~A

there's no place like home

enjoyed this little ditty Jess

I'll go out on a limb and give an alternate form :
Had I half a brain
I'd not with drugs dull my pain

were I truly brave
others' fear I'd not crave

And had I a heart
I'd not charge for my art
just a bit of word juggling..........stan

to see the Wizard, and he will fix all your problems. He will remove the bothersome parts of your psyche, and replace them with sweetness and light. Ha, ha, ha! Nice work Jess. I don't think it needs anything. For a brainfart, it was rather effective. ~ Gee

I think you gave a new slant to 'we're off to see the wizard' in this and perhaps it's just what the old film needed lol a weirdelf twist :)

I'm a-mused when I see possible revisions of an already enjoyable poem that does its job, so to speak.

If one thinks about it: self and other, nature and thought, this and that feelings are about the only poetic subjects...however, there are endless variations on these themes.

We often rewrite the same poem a thousand different ways, especially if one makes the same observation that the 19th century poet/mystic Bokonon wrote of: "Let your life be the poem you write."

~A

~A

I have too say, this is the best bullshit you have ever written. I am amazed that you could write dribble like this and make it work. Damn brother you're truly something else. Anna is right I laughed the whole way through, an explanation is not needed Were you medicated when you wrote it, I'd like to know. Over the rainbow medicated or just plain straight.

i enjoyed this write, and its turn to the otherside of Kansas.
"hey. where's the ulgy dog?"
Eddie