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Power Outtage

verse-
head against the wall
i'm waiting for your call
but i know you can't right now

the safety net is stretching
every time i fall
and they've got me figured out

bridge-
yes i'm scared to death
but does it mean a thing?
yes i said i miss you
but that couldn't give you wings

chorus-
blackout
turn the lights out
i gotta get out
before i go crazy again
shout
scream it out loud
how this love will be stronger
than the rest

About This Poem

Last Few Words: really, really rough draft! an old song i'm completely ripping apart and putting back together. change a verse, add a bridge, and bam! new song!

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: somewhere in the middle of the mountains, USA

Favorite Poets: life.

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Comments

emogothgirl

emogothgirl

13 years 5 months ago

i see...

i think i'll try that with the other half of the song; great idea.
thanks,
mag

emogothgirl

emogothgirl

13 years 5 months ago

thanks!

it is, i'm determined to finish it, at one time or another. to the death! haha.
thanks,
mag

S

scribbler

13 years 5 months ago

hi

Probably needs a bit more length to be really effective. Should this be read in a beat similar to Hank Williams Jr.? lol..........stan

emogothgirl

emogothgirl

13 years 5 months ago

yeah

the shredding of former writing will take some time; it WILL BE LONGER! and i don't think so stan. :P
thanks for stopping by,
mag