Rula

Mar 09, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

This poem is part of the challenge:

Precious Stars

Oh for these stars, such grace,
A pleasure to look at and to embrace.
Shining beacons of unconditional love,
Guiding in emulation of those above.

Priceless blossoms, precious ones,
My awesome princess and the handsome sons.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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Comments

neopoet

1 year 3 months ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Precious Stars" captures a sense of admiration and love through the imagery of stars and family members. The use of celestial imagery to describe loved ones is a powerful metaphor that conveys a sense of awe and reverence. However, the poem could benefit from further exploration and development of the theme. Consider expanding on the characteristics or qualities that make these individuals comparable to stars. Additionally, paying attention to the rhythm and structure of the poem could enhance its overall impact. Keep refining your ideas and imagery to create a more cohesive and engaging piece.

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Lavender

1 year 3 months ago

Precious Stars

Hello, Rula,
This is so gentle and serene, but full of joyful energy, too. Such a tender final line. Precious, indeed.
Thank you!
Lx

Rula

1 year 3 months ago

Thank you dear Lavender

I just thought I should take a different take of the stars. Hope it works out well.
It means a lot to be read and have such a nice comment.

Clentin

1 year 3 months ago

Very nice poem, you present a

Very nice poem, you present a personal view of the stars. Really liked it.

Rula

1 year 3 months ago

Thank you Clentin

For reading and the generous comment.
Really appreciate it.

Rula

1 year 3 months ago

Thank you Clentin

For reading and the generous comment.I am pleased to know that it appealed to you.
Really appreciate it.

Candlewitch

1 year 3 months ago

Dear Rula,

Your poem reminds me of sky-gazing with my Dad. He showed me Orion! He told me that when I saw Orion in the sky, it would be him watching over me.

*hugs, Cat

Rula

1 year 3 months ago

Dearest Cat.

I am so happy to know that this piece moved you in a way or another. What can I ask more than such a kind poetess to relate to what I wrote.
Thanks for sharing such amazing memories.