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Nov 12, 2018
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PRIMAL STALK (November contest)
The hunt begins
for hunger gnaws
while the mainspring slowly spins
and the stalker gives no pause.
Sun sinks slowly in the west,
fellow carnivores join in the fray
each hoping they can pass the test
of filling belly at the end of day.
Many targets are passed by
in the quest for the right one.
This hunter is choosy, sly.
His prey when found will soon be done.
And there it is, just off the path,
no idea what is to come.
Quick turn, predetermined aftermath.
The quarry already beyond numb.
I, the hunter, magically
turn into a KFC.
*KFC is a fast food chicken restaurant chain
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Roscoe Lane
6 years 7 months ago
Yes,
Yes you had me hooked, waiting for a gory ending. Better to end this way LOL. Regards Roscoe..
scribbler
6 years 7 months ago
Hi Roscoe
Glad you liked the twist at the end lol......stan
raj
6 years 7 months ago
good one Stan but had
good one Stan but had expected more fun than the end line...
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scribbler
6 years 7 months ago
Greetings raj
For some reason I just couldn't come up with anything worthy of an out loud laugh so I settled on maybe getting folks to smile
scribbler
6 years 7 months ago
Hi Lowell
Yeah it's not laugh out loud funny but maybe at least smile worthy which is all that's required of the contest. Appreciate your honesty and ideas
scribbler
6 years 7 months ago
Not to worry
When it comes to contest I can only post for fun because I'm a bit ineligible to win lol. BTW I'm about to start up an implied imagery shop if you'd like to join in.
Barbara Writes
4 years 6 months ago
Hi Stan
I thought this was awesome. KFC lol on the hunt for KFC
scribbler
4 years 6 months ago
Hi Barb
All the poor chickens lol. Good to see you dropped in
Barbara Writes
4 years 6 months ago
yeah
Im a vegan so the chicken safe from me lol
scribbler
4 years 6 months ago
Hi Barb
We each have our own choice for diet.........or perhaps you are finally admitting you came from the star Vega lol
Barbara Writes
4 years 6 months ago
Yep
you said it
scribbler
4 years 6 months ago
LOL
Carolina girl
Gracy
4 years 6 months ago
Hi Stan, I'm enjoying this
Hi Stan, I'm enjoying this one immensely. The end rhymes and spacing are all perfect. You did make me smile with your ending, I also thought it would be gory...lol.
We have no KFC in Argentina, but reading the comments I now understand. No nits at all, Gracy
scribbler
4 years 6 months ago
Hi Grace
I appreciate you dropping by on this oldie written by an oldie lol
scribbler
4 years 6 months ago
Wolves huh?
Two legged or four legged?