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Prince Harry's Couldron
There's that black pot
Looming large
And shadowing the kettles,
All sooted like the lot.
There's the master
Lean and tall
And capped, squared;
(encompassed actually)
In checkered skins
and oddly fitting kilts.
A Scotsman on his rite,
A concrete slab afore
The pinafore
And big brother watching
Amusingly.
All we're, all are
Stringed puppets of the Master,
Playing lyres to the tunes
That drop like oil
From his dish,
And flowing like wine and corn
At the mercy of his secret will.
There's that couldron,
Looming black and large
Above the city and the sea.
One wonders what he stirs
Within his secret lake.
There're the stooges
Shadowed in his pomp
And pageantry, plump
And pride and pose.
Mere puppets of his will.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Not much here, I just want to know how the poem appeals to you at first read. Then, after reading over.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
William Saint George
14 years ago
Nice
Thanks for the encouraging comment
weirdelf
13 years 8 months ago
Similar crit to your poem on time.
We are not fucking puppets!
Accusing others of being so may be valid, but as poets don't we owe our readers more than smug derogatory condemnation?
Again, your word-crafting is excellent.