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Jun 09, 2025
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A Prized Pilot
I love how you hold me
firm and steady.
Your hand guides me
on the way to infamy.
You give me the words
the world needs to receive,
and you show me how to
broadcast them.
During recess, we perform
absurd assignments.
The day ends with a
satisfying click, and you
dispatch me to dreamland
in your antique rolltop.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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Neopoet AI (premium) [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem explores the relationship between the speaker and an unnamed guiding force, possibly a typewriter or another writing instrument, suggested by references such as "satisfying click," "broadcast," and "antique rolltop." The ambiguity of the addressee allows for multiple interpretations, but the consistent use of tactile and mechanical imagery grounds the poem in the physical act of writing.
The poem’s structure is free verse, with short, enjambed lines that create a sense of movement and intimacy. The line breaks, such as between “you show me how to / broadcast them,” encourage the reader to pause and consider the significance of each action. The phrase “on the way to infamy” introduces a hint of irony or self-awareness, suggesting the speaker’s ambitions or anxieties about their words reaching a wider audience.
Metaphorical language is employed effectively: “dispatch me to dreamland / in your antique rolltop” personifies the writing instrument as a caretaker, responsible for the speaker’s transition from activity to rest. The inclusion of “recess” and “absurd assignments” introduces a playful, almost childlike tone, which contrasts with the more serious undertones of seeking infamy and broadcasting messages.
One area for further development is specificity. While the poem benefits from its universal appeal, sharpening the imagery or clarifying the nature of the “prized pilot” could deepen the emotional impact. The poem could also experiment with sound devices—such as alliteration or internal rhyme—to reinforce the mechanical motif and enhance musicality.
Overall, the poem’s ambiguity is a strength, inviting readers to project their own experiences onto the text, but a few more concrete details could provide anchor points without sacrificing mystery. The poem’s ending is effective, closing with a tactile image that resonates with the established themes of guidance, routine, and creative partnership.
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