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Prophecy of the Psychotic Peacock Feather
Oh chthonic filigree, optical oracle, pinned firefly
Sound the spell’s dream fugue!
Phoenix feather in the Masonic Mosque,
marble curator’s crypt cacophony,
opal eyes funerary moons with her
decanted ether
carnival barker
the Tarot of the carnival hour’s hues.
Alight the scent of cubed domes, ever more distant
the star, the sphinx’s spherical Yellow form parallel.
Nautilus web of sonic bluebells, sitar scimitar’s
gag fangs,
dropsy blood. In the dawning ore
of the Psychotic Peacock,
brushfire of denuded noumenaries.
Dimming Isaiah’s dictum of Inmost Light
Oh chthonic filigree, flamenco fission
succubus carnie’s ouroboros oxidote oolite
Smoke machine of oboe pulsar psalmistry
Dawning ore of the psychotic peacock,
Sea mariner squeezebox stilled in iridescent iodine
Restore the oxidized onyx moon's lunar cryptorium,
planetariums dimmed and without wonder.
dimming Isaiah’s dictum of Inmost Light
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Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem, "Prophecy of the Psychotic Peacock Feather," is rich in imagery and symbolism, which can be both a strength and a potential area for improvement. The use of language is complex and evocative, creating a unique and intriguing atmosphere. However, the dense and abstract nature of the language might make the poem difficult for some readers to understand and engage with.
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Overall, the poem is highly imaginative and original, but it might benefit from more clarity and accessibility. The poet might consider simplifying some of the language, providing more context for the references, and developing a clearer narrative or thematic progression.
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