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Jan 25, 2025
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Psapfo 301
Your breast pierced
By Love’s venomous
Iniquity
Beautiful adept
Of Olympus
Bestower of mysteries
Adonis the maid-faced
Weep at the wealth
Placed upon his eyes
Men were born
To squander
Your gifts
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5 months 3 weeks ago
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Jackweb
5 months 3 weeks ago
This piem
A poignant and thought-provoking piece. Indeed, the tone is melancholic!
Many men have fallen under the spell of beauty and desire.
Well scripted.
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Dalton
5 months 3 weeks ago
Hi Brother
Yes I love mythology and I’m a romantic we men are fools to desire though a woman’s sexiest attribute is her brain cheers Jackweb