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Pulling the Pin

That leaking faucet was maddening,
it had nothing to do with his car
breaking down, catching his wife
running around or the totalitarian way
his boss ran the office;

no, it was that sleep depriving drip
he needed to grenade.

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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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themoonman

themoonman

12 years 8 months ago

Ello Lovely,

I b's fair to middlin, and you?

Yes this one begs for more, I was going for impact consolidated.

themoonman

themoonman

11 years ago

Hi Lenny,

Thanks man, sorry for the spastic time thing, I'm
undeniably human.

Richard

Geezer

Geezer

12 years 8 months ago

I too...

had the thought that it sounded like the beginning of a story.
Then I realised that this was the whole story! Anyone should be able to see that the poem describes a person that is misdirecting their anger toward the faucet, so that they wouldn't feel guilty about blowing up their wife , the house and the car. The boss is next! Loved this one Richard! ~ Gee

themoonman

themoonman

11 years ago

HI Gee,

Can't help but want to blow up something at times,
life gets crazy. Glad you liked the little poem.

Richard

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 8 months ago

Richard

Loved this piece, just turn the water off at night lol, will send you a Grenade by post but I must retain the pin, as it's so useful for removing stones from horses hooves, I do hope the gaffer tape holds in the post,
Yours Sparrow

themoonman

themoonman

11 years ago

Ian,

I'm still waiting on that grenade (lol) ... thanks!

Robert Melliard

Robert Melliard

11 years ago

This poem

is short but packs a big punch. Two huge problems are mentioned almost in passing, as if the silly faucet were the only trouble. How often our real problems are channelled into expression via minor cares! But I only see that now of course, after reading your poem.
Best wishes,
Robert.

themoonman

themoonman

11 years ago

Hi Robert,

I appreciate your look into this poem, it is one I actually
liked because of a few things, short but strong, flows fairly
well and the title fits perfectly without giving anything away
until after the read.

thanks,

Richard