Pulsation

Rumbling, pounding, shaking, sounding,
Rushing, roaring, emotions soaring,
Screaming, dreaming, stomach squeaming,
Shaking, quaking, pulse is racing,
Leaping, squeaking, no time for speaking,
Dashing, daring, extremely scaring,
Churning, turning, muscles burning,
Ride the roller coaster!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Although, normally, you shouldn't use ing ending words for rhyming, this was an experiment a few years agos to see if I could capture the feeling of riding on a roller coaster.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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Comments

magics02

14 years 2 months ago

Sounds like a tornado Rett

Wow your expressive write got me in a whirlwind. It is spell bounding (ing) and you got it moving. Good job Texan. Hope to see you soon in chat.

Happy Easter to you and the family
Ms Mona

Rett

14 years 2 months ago

Thanks Mona

Glad you enjoyed it. Happy Easter.

CCfire

14 years 2 months ago

Actually made me feel sea

Actually made me feel sea sick reading it and as roller coasters have that effect on me and I don't ride them often I'd say it worked well here..now if you'll excuse me I think I need to find a bucket! :P

Rett

14 years 2 months ago

LOL Sorry Chez

I hear Dramamine helps. Never been motion sick except for twice in my life. One was playing a computer game where I was in hallways (I have a touch of claustrophobia) and the other was when I came down with vertigo. Wow, that was fun!

Glad you think it came over well.

lou

14 years 2 months ago

Hi

I love the way this poem builds to a crescendo, it felt as if it might burst by the end.

lou

Rett

14 years 2 months ago

Thanks lou

I appreciate it. I was trying to capture the feeling and excitement of a really good roller coaster.