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pushed away
So every day I wonder
Did I sign up for this?
Is this your meaning of love?
Is it how it's forever to be?
How did you end up before me?
I'm I just a queen bee?
Fancy class life
All the great things to be a wife
But shall I ever find joy?
Would I give birth to a boy?
You fail to realize the small moments
Forgetting you have opponents
Fail to give me small compliments
Can't even realize my accomplishments
Your silence is a very harsh comment
What do I do for myself
Time I don't get to share my dream
Friends I can't tell they'll steal
Is this really my stream
He wants ap opportunity
How do I say no when you hardly around
Maybe he is an all round
Trying to gibe me sanity
How do I reject
While you can't even project
I'm trying only to protect
But where is my respect?
Your silence is a harsh comment
Your silence is a compliment
That I can't amend
I'm a lady I need attention
Not to mention passion
I'm not after just a position
I don't need a mansion
I just need appreciation
Only want commutation
Red was meant to show danger
But had let me to anger
About to meet a stranger
Amogelang Mokobane
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
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How was my language use?
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Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments
weirdelf
7 years 10 months ago
A powerful and beautiful poem, Amogelang,
I hope you like my reading of it and ask your permission to post it to our Neopoet.com Facebook site. Especially as one of the many new South African poets joining Neopoet.
https://soundcloud.com/neopoet/pushed-away-by-amogelang-mokobane
AMOGELANG MOKOBANE
7 years 10 months ago
im honored
well I'm happy and excited of your view of it and yes you can post it on Facebook and if you wouldn't mind mention me or tag me I go by "Amo van Mok" on Facebook
weirdelf
7 years 10 months ago
Can't find you by the name
Amo van Mok on Facebook, mate. Is that exactly how you spell your name there?
Anyway I have posted it to our Neopoet.com Facebook page.
https://www.facebook.com/groups/1737302023208400/?ref=bookmarks
AMOGELANG MOKOBANE
7 years 10 months ago
Name
Yeah maybe you could not find me because I want in the group
weirdelf
7 years 10 months ago
Well, Amogelang, it's going to be a few years yet before I make
millions of dollars out of my poetry so there is no real point in using my real name here. But I do anyway, a bit of recognition doesn't hurt and your poetry is good enough to deserve it.