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Feb 09, 2016
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Pyromaniac
Anger slowly burning
Rage ever consuming
It floods and it flushes
Pink into the cheeks
Like a human torch exploding
You who holds my matches
And sears the heart with yearning
Scalds the soul with hurting
Igniting hidden reservoirs
Of oil and kerosene
Wicks heated with gasoline
And with a word or a touch
With love or with hate
My arsonist, you create
Within and out of me
A pyromaniac
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Esker
9 years 5 months ago
the dangerous passions
flicker and sizzle
that tension
reminds me of heart sickness
a true malady tested
flushed skin
heart rate fast
shallow breathing
the thoughts racing
fight or flee
like a madness
engulfing the house of
cards
all the energy released
magnesium and steel...
thank U
Rainy Day
9 years 5 months ago
Thank You Esker
Thank you Esker! That is beautiful!
Esker
9 years 5 months ago
Esker searchs beautiful...
there is the surmise and the suffuse
the grand and gratious
the maladious meliforous
the ugly and sharp
glimmering
I do like the way you put your poems
together
again
thank U~!
Geezer
9 years 5 months ago
conflagration...
Complete! So much heat here! I like this a lot. The bits of rhyme here and there, make this very readable and add to the overall work. Your language use was fine and the consistency throughout was great. Gee
Rainy Day
9 years 4 months ago
Thank you
Thank you both so very much