IN A QUIET PLACE

I took the words that tell
my thoughts and fears
locked them with a key
in a quiet place
where no one
will see them
again.

I’ve opened up my heart
bore my soul
to set my spirit free
from the demons
that are hunting me
down.

but the world can be
a cruel and unforgiving
place for some…
for most.

Now like a ghost
I glide
through a silent world
just me
alone
my thoughts locked away
in a quiet place
where no one will
see them
again.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: USA

Comments

loved

13 years 4 months ago

Your voice

Your voice can never be strung
the everlasting poets had sung

Your voice can never be strung,
the everlasting poets had sung
Till their very last
but many like you and me go unsung
and
in the boxes of vaults unopened,
our messages remain recorded
as in time machines,
when some alien will come
and
unearth,
then alone you and I,
will no longer remain
unsung

Geremia

13 years 4 months ago

This is really extremely good!

This is really extremely good! Poetically said.
Joe

loved

13 years 4 months ago

You see the ray of light that many don't

no,
not coz they are blind
but they simply won't

My mind is that of Einstein's
but sad to say
he had six cortexes
I have seven,
but his all worked
mine does only one

Geremia

13 years 4 months ago

But you,too, have rare

But you,too, have rare perceptions of "light" -all one has to do is read behind your words. There is much more than one thinks.

Thanks,

Joe

weirdelf

13 years 4 months ago

So why did you post it?

Self indulgent bullshit.

Geremia

13 years 4 months ago

Because it is poetry ,and I

Because it is poetry ,and I am putting my old poetry in a quiet place to write on dfferent themes.
You asked me in one comment iif it was just a "character flaw' or if you were just a "dickhead."
Answer: both

Stop looking for the bête noire in my poetry. You know I w rite better "stuff" than most--includng you..
Your "self-indulgent bull shit" again goes to character and assumes someone I am not,as I assume you are really not a dkhead--at least some of the time. Now, behave yourself.

weirdelf

13 years 4 months ago

This is bullshit

I have given honest, praise for your good works
and severely criticised your bad works.
Why can't you take it like everyone else?

You have also severally attacked others who have criticised your works and attitudes. You've threatened to leave Neopoet many times because of it. It's getting very tired man. Make a decision. Be a man. Stand by your stance. Stay or fuck off.

I would personally prefer you stay because your poetry has improved out of site recently. But make a decision and stand by it and stop being a drama queen.