A Quiet Revolution (May Contest)

As spring creeps in with softened huex3

nice words
but used three times
in such a short sweet poem
takes away the summers hue

gives winter its due
good poetry none the less
coming from you

did not know all this
Now I am wisened

will try free style

So well written, as always from you Jane. So much said in so few words. As to title suggestions,
Gentle Spring.
Turn, Turn, Turn.
Away with the old.
Rebirth.

Spring is a woman's season
as may women get pregnant
also
it's the same with the animal kingdom
when so many of them are in heat
and
conceive ..
You are a class teacher ma'am..
During winter women like to live
like in hibernation
it's cold as cold as are men...
often

I love the poem, but not the title. I think the reason is that I consider the word "revolution" a unique event, politically or otherwise (like an art movement or a brand new way of doing something ). Spring does return each year, so its a repeated event, glorious, but not unique in the sense of a revolution.
Spring executing its "timely coup" is combining nature to a political event, as is "war" to some extent, which I think works in the context of the poem.
Like a mythological painting, how about something like "The Triumph of Spring"

Absolutely. In the end, it is a personal offering, and that is totally respected. As a workshop venue, we readers can just make our suggestions which sometimes will resonate and other times not.
Revolution is indeed a big word...like the Beatles, "number 9, number 9, number nine...."

silent revolution...
a tinge of sadness for me
there is always a victor
one way or another
and losses..

I like the title but the last
'silence'..me being me
put in 'stifle'
for up here in boreal old
Ontario there is always
the bit of snow...
the last hurrah before
spring muffles that width
of harsh sound due to the
barren removal of trees
grasses to soften the sounds
'unless the soft strong weather
but then there is usually wind'
just my change...otherwise
a lively wave topped read!

thank u Jane.

w

'stills' I understand that quiet though
the less sounding..the more new of
the renewal of seeing or sensing

W

This reads smooth and unforced for a style with such strict form. Thanks for entering contest.....stan

Little poem dear Jane.
You've absolutely said much in few words and I thought the repeated lines are very effective.
I wrote many triolets before and as I remember you have to keep it in tetrameter all through. Saying this, your poem still perfectly works for the contest. I'm sure you are making the judge's decision a hard one.
Kudos and best of luck dear.