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Apr 02, 2012
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R a v e n i n g S u p i n e
Amavi
blood trails feed
nights wingtips breeding stars
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
judyanne
13 years 3 months ago
hi esker
i keep coming back to this
even though i don't really know what you are saying it conjures up major images in my mind
i love the third line -
do you mean for 'nights' to have an ownership apostrophe?
excellent short form
love judy
Esker
13 years 3 months ago
Hey judy
Im so glad you get this
thats what its about
now you have my attention
Ownership...Night's
wow You got me thinking!
I more think my lines in opening
are like headings
"Nights!!"...Wingtips are breeding stars..(like an exhale)
"Mornings"..how the dreams have wandered far! (Like a question)
"Night's Wingtips"
"Breeding stars"
"a streamer format
spinning far..."
Im glad you caught this and raised this ponder
Im very impressed
its been awhile since I rocked ideas with fast
flexible intelligence like this
not for a long time when I was on the road
thanks a lot man! you've made my morning here!!
Mr Wolf
Esker
13 years 3 months ago
ravenous laid back hunt
amavi to have loved or love hungrily or something like this
like a Pet name or Pet heading
for passion for obsession
that ache that growls
that wind that prowls
in the soul and keeps one up at night
definately ownership on Night's Wingtips
breeding stars
obsession brings obsession copulation
the stars
merge spanning dreams
for me it came from "Fuck Obsession"
(I used to wear Mens Obsession cologne)
I threw it against a retaining wall and had
a cigarette one night
preferring to smell just of the night of the
stars of the lonliness of that empty
soul hungering for idealogy
the glass shards glittering like thoughts
constelllations of pain and longing
excitement
Mr Wolf
judyanne
13 years 3 months ago
hey mr wolf :)
your explanation is poetry in itself xx
weirdelf
13 years 3 months ago
As usual, I don't read the explanation,
but acknowledge that the poem is worthy of it.
I've never read such a short poem of yours,
oh brother, you are growing beyond my lungs breadth.
Nordic cloud
13 years 3 months ago
A wolf howl
How can anyone who smokes
smell the night's perfumes?
This is an abstract painting
with human expressions showing through.
Nordic cloud.