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Jan 06, 2022
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Ralph and Alice (2.0)
I really loved that show
The old kinescope reruns
It probably wouldn’t fly today
But he really loved her, you could tell,
between all the laughs
She knew who she married,
and never once set foot on the moon,
despite the opportunities offered
His constant, his foil
they still live happily ever after
in old black and white New York
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Adding a bit to a previous version.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Geezer
3 years 6 months ago
I thought...
it looked familiar! I really like this version as it is short, sweet and succinct! You hit all the salient points and got the tale told!
I loved that show too! I never thought about the show promoting domestic violence or making fun of anyone. It was a show about a couple and their neighbors being who they really were. Ralph's anger was purely emotional and you knew that he would never really hit Alice or Norton! Trixie and Norton were the always laid back pair that were the perfect foils for their neighbors. And you're right, as long as we remember them, they will always live in that black and white apartment in old New York! Good work! ~ Geez.
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Triskelion
3 years 6 months ago
Humour with
such absurd theatrics probably averted as much domestic violence back then as it would have promoted it. It's still one of the most entertaining shows on my list.
I enjoyed your piece about one of the most cinematically correct shows to ever grace television.
Thomas
scribbler
3 years 6 months ago
Yep
A show which was made before the PC crowd destroyed humor
Geezer
3 years 6 months ago
Yes...
you are right Scribbler. P.C. has ruined humor and comedy in general! ~ Geez.
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