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raj

Aug 19, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Rapids (Tanka)

somewhere down the stream
bubbles of my liquid desire
become gentle waves

while sounds of ecstatic throes
vanish in the aftermath.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Comments

4 years 10 months ago

dear raj,

a beautiful and exquisite moment to be cherished...I love your descriptive way with words. sublime.

*hugs, Cat
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R

4 years 10 months ago

Thanks dear Cat

appreciate your visit to my page and for your appreciative comment..

much love and hugs...

R

4 years 10 months ago

HI Teddy

Thanks for your comment ...good to know your found it gorgeous..

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4 years 10 months ago

Lovely poem, raj. My thoughts

Lovely poem, raj. My thoughts are the same as Teddy's and Cat's. What is the name of this Eastern form?
Enjoyed, Gracy

R

4 years 10 months ago

Hi Gracy

thanks for taking time to read and comment...

Name of this eastern form is Tanka...i am copying below from google what Tanka form is

How to Write a Tanka Poem. Tanka poems follow a set of rules. They all have five lines and each line follows a pattern: the first line has five syllables, the second line has seven syllables, the third line has five syllables, the fourth line has seven syllables, and the fifth line has seven syllables.

hope the above helps clarify your query..

thanks again..

C

4 years 10 months ago

Raj

subtle is the one word that comes to me as I think I am coming away with aa difeent thought

R

4 years 10 months ago

Hi Chrys

thanks for your comment...good to know you liked it,...you said "I am coming away with a different thought"...curious to know what it is...

be well..

4 years 10 months ago

The Rapids

Hi, raj,
I think Chrys and I are possibly interpreting this the same way. For me, this is subtle - and almost perfect in its energy. Very nice.
Thank you!
L

S

4 years 10 months ago

Het raj

A lot said and perhaps even more implied with just a few lines

R

4 years 10 months ago

Hi Stan

thanks for reading and your comment...

be well ..stay safe dear friend...