Reach

Reach
for the dream
to achieve
the prestigious medal
of the triumphant,

the world's acknowedgement
of being a champion,
recorded in history,

a moment to be proud of
by warriors of the arena,
representing their countries
with courage to strive
beyond their limits
to be the best
that they can be

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: singapore, SGP

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Sarojini Naidu and friends in Neopoet.

Comments

weirdelf

10 years 2 months ago

25th of April was "Australia Day"

when we acknowledge men who died in war. Whilst honouring the heroism of men in uniform the phrase "They gave their life for their country". It is a lie. Their lives were taken.

I do realise the poem is far more than that and it a strong piece, powerfully written. The allegory could perhaps be reinforced.

alidzain

10 years 2 months ago

Hi Jess

This poem is a tribute to the athletes for the upcoming sports event in my country. that is why there's the lines
"of being a champion,
recorded in history,"

Alid

weirdelf

10 years 2 months ago

Given the significance of the date in Australia

I hope you forgive my misreading.

alidzain

10 years 2 months ago

Jess

no prob. I can see why you made the mistake.

Alid

lovedly

10 years 2 months ago

b happy& congrats

jess for once is sharing flowers
read my
Paint me red
and
do comment.... I like ur sincerity

write one on Nepal UR good
hows health?

weirdelf

10 years 2 months ago

I am not a laureate.

I can not write in this tragedy, sorry.

judyanne

10 years 2 months ago

Alid

Well written
But it is a bit of a word wall atm....
I think it needs to be broken into a few stanzas in order that the reader gets a chance to breath and take in each part....

love judy
xxx