Realization

With always busy life
from every side defiled
by those whom unending strife
took to new lows of sin reviled

I suddenly realized
their cold antipathy
successful living demonized
was nothing but a bleak facsimile
of the human psyche unraveled.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Newsletter contest poem.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Earth Vicinity (within a five light-year radius), ZZC

Favorite Poets: John Donne, T.S. Eliot, Serendipity, Emily Dickenson, Kailashana, Charles Bukowski, Kabir, Rett, Dalton, W. B. Yeats, William Blake, Rainer Maria Rilke, and many other Neopoet poets; Neopoet has heavily influenced my poetry and my ability to write it well.

Comments

scribbler

14 years 7 months ago

realization

This will be a hard one to beat in the contest. Good luck.......stan

Race_9togo

14 years 7 months ago

Thanks Stan

I don't usually enter contests, but that line intrigued me.

Race_9togo

14 years 7 months ago

LOL

Thanks Shirl.

judyanne

14 years 7 months ago

that line had me stumped

great job jim
i really like this - i was compelled to read it over and over and i 'got' more each time....
cheers
love judy
xxxx

Race_9togo

14 years 7 months ago

Thanks Judyanne,

I was a little lost myself, trying to figure out a meaning I could build something around. I must have read the line a dozen times before I figured one out. I don't know why, but it just grabbed me, and demanded some words. I wasn't going to enter it into the newsletter contest - I dislike competition - but then I thought well, why not?
I'm pleased that you enjoyed it so much.