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REALIZATIONS of AGE (final title for title shop)
Too many days I've spent beyond
the hills and hollows close to home
wearing thin familial bond
every time I chose to roam.
And, yes, I have seen many things
which are seldom seen elsewhere.
I've heard when winter's silence rings,
watched bucks rut without a care.
Once in November I saw a play.
A mother bob cat teaching young to hunt
just after frosty break of day
(their "prey" was aware of their stunt)
Old beaver ponds filled with wild bass
used to bear my wading's wake
which rippled water smooth as glass.
Trips there ended with my knee's break.
Always she waited home for me
to greet me with a hug and smile
making sure I'd never see
she'd been worried all the while.
Beginning a few years gone by
I started thinking about this.
By spending so much time beneath wild sky
had I somehow to love been remiss?
Perhaps only old men think such things
as years stretch long and bones grow sore;
they realize the joy which true love brings
which keeps them warm down to the core.
So I still travel country roads
but with a slight change to my tome
for now I also unburden life's loads
while on my way back to my home.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
10 years 1 month ago
"Perceptions"
would be mine
scribbler
10 years 1 month ago
thank you
I've had this sitting around untitled for a spell. The subject varies enough that for me to find a fitting title has eluded me........stan
Rula
10 years 1 month ago
You're welcom Stan
Yes, I agree. Many titles fit there.
emeka ozurumba
10 years 1 month ago
ha ha ha- DRAMATIC I loved it
found an old man chasing a mouse with a mallet.....how dross'
co i cross and i fuzz i floss and i gloss- gross still it does me- no BOSS!
the old man then shouted to me, " NO DON'T KILL THAT MOUSE, THAT'S MY MOTHER"
wesley snow
10 years 1 month ago
My first choice was "Stan".
But the true suggestion (this is how I saw it) : "Paleolithic". Seriously.
A Cro-Magnon man on a walk in a world like ours.
scribbler
10 years 1 month ago
UGH!
Me understand you idea. Must now club Susan and paint deer on cave wall.............stan. PS thanks for the idea
wesley snow
10 years 1 month ago
Remember
they were a civilized people with arts and culture. Alliances and enemies. They were just like us. The beginnings of man's society.
And they didn't say "ugh".
scribbler
10 years 1 month ago
Indeed
They were likely the originators of poetry which they set to a steady beat to make easier to remember.....stan
alidzain
10 years 1 month ago
Stan
Here's my try. "Traveller's Thoughts"
Alid ".
scribbler
10 years 1 month ago
Hi Alid
Thanks for your input. The many different ideas which have been put forth have supplied some streams of thought I'd not considered........stan
Sparrow
10 years 1 month ago
Stan
"Natures Shadow" would fit the bill for a few of your wilderness jaunts, this could be the title for a series of your stories from your eyes..
Yours, Ian
judyanne
10 years 1 month ago
hi Stan
My Two Loves ??
In Perspective ??
love judy
xxx
scribbler
10 years 1 month ago
tough one
ain't it? I appreciate all suggestions because this IS a toughie..........stan
scribbler
10 years 1 month ago
Thank you all
The many suggestions, though not used, led me down the path to this title........stan