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Dec 04, 2010
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The Reconciliation
a series of thunder broke the silence,
as the wind blew hard that it took away my faith,
the fiery fleet were now purified by that great cobalt stone
the underworld covered with heaven's frost.
ashes from the flames were used to rebuild the castle of Lucifer,
which will be the hall of the resurrected souls from Hades..
the wall that then separates the two worlds
turned into a golden bridge that makes both worlds paradise...
angels came in the center, singing praises to God
followed by Lucifer's coronation to the left side of The Father,
everyone's in bliss as if it's Christmas of the mortals..
an earthquake occurred.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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Comments
scribbler
13 years 7 months ago
Hmmm......
Reconciliation of heaven and hell. A worthy concept. Were it me I'd work on this poem in order to bring the write up to the level of the subject. Could begin by inserting so in line 2 after blow. This could be very powerful with a bit more work...................stan