Recreant

This write rather reminds one of Dickens' "A Christmas Carol" with its formless ghost appearing and wreaking havoc on the subjects' sanity! A very readable piece with lots of good imagery!

A strong dark write. I thought you need to check the placement of the comas especially before 'and' and after 'rude' as it a bit disturbs the read.
I especially liked the word usage in:

"It was unfair
for you to come
like rain unannounced,
to stir up a storm
of thoughts
that flock in rebellion
of my chosen occupation,
all the while singing your name
ad nauseam."
very effective indeed.

Works either way.

Very well written.

One of your better writes, solid with loads of meaning,
Yours Ian.T

This is excellent and stands as is without further suggestion etc. I liked the conversational tone of it

I really enjoyed your poem. I think the title suits it and each stanza adds a special piece of imagery or word choice to the total effect of the poem (this is a good thing; not a single stanza seems superfluous). If I could make a suggestion, the lines "unwanted, (yet still honestly desired)" were confusing to me.

When I read parenthesis I read them as a whisper. So in this stanza, I hear the narrator whispering their true feelings. It works to show how the narrator feels like they must be initially dishonest for whatever reason, but I think there is still too much of a contradiction with "unwanted", if that makes sense. I think "unwarranted" might work better, but the change is up to you. I hope you don't mind my suggestion; it is just what made sense to me.

I think the poem is full of great lines and my tiny recommended change isn't going to transform the poem substantially because it's already rather wonderful. The blend of something scary or dark with something romantic definitely appeals to me.

Thanks!