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Lavender
Lavender
Oct 18, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Redemption

She tread along the world's savage street
eyes cast down in tragic defeat
toward a pining narrow light
barely seen, quite benight
till a hand reached out
open, devout
taking hold
consoled
saved

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

8 months 3 weeks ago

Dear Lavender,

Is this poem's structure known as a nonet? I like it...had an image of wet fallen leaves!

*hugs, Cat

Lavender

Lavender

8 months 3 weeks ago

Hello, Cat,

Yes, this is a rhyming nonet poem. I really like your interpretation!
Thank you!
Lx

Geezer

Geezer

8 months 3 weeks ago

I can see...

a soliloquy coming here, maybe? Maybe a scenario with a couple of characters? Beginning with [THAT] night?
Interesting theme and could be very interesting scenarios. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Lavender

8 months 3 weeks ago

Hello, Geezer,

You are kinda sorta onto me. I did not care for the character in my last poem, but more important, after posting, I didn't care for the way the poem made me feel as a person and a poet. It just wasn't my true nature. So...I hopefully redeemed the character, and the way I feel about myself and my poetry. Too much info...too deep? Ah, well...
Anyhoo, thank you so much for reading and your insight!
Lx

Geezer

Geezer

8 months 2 weeks ago

NTMI...

Yeah, I understand. I find your character unimpeachable my dear. As to who you are, it is never a question, ask anyone who knows you, ~ Geez.
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Rula

Rula

8 months 3 weeks ago

Dearest Lavender

What a nonet! Apt word choice (as ever)
Nothing to suggest, but lots of appreciation for a well written one.
Thank you for sharing.

Lavender

Lavender

8 months 3 weeks ago

Hello, Rula,

Thank you for reading! The nonet is becoming one of my favorite structured forms. I appreciate your kind words, my friend!
Lx

mark

mark

8 months 2 weeks ago

A tough topic to squeeze

into this type of poetry.
An Etheree (minus one line) lol
I do believe that 'tll is not a word and it is in fact till. Chris used to profess that a lot (bless her departed soul)
Anyhow, if you can pull off a Villanelle you could make an Etheree (if that was your aim)
[hugs]
Mark

Lavender

Lavender

8 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Mark!

Yes, a bit of humility is always hard to swallow. I'm grateful for the heads up on 'til! I've used it incorrectly many times - good to know going forward! (Yes, bless dear Chris. She offered countless information and poetic advice.)

This is actually a rhyming nonet - intentional nine lines with descending syllables in each line, but I might give that Etheree a try soon!

Thank you for reading!
L

Triskelion

Triskelion

8 months 1 week ago

'til?

..till? I was taught 'til is the short version of "until" ...I till my garden spring and fall. Is it strictly used under poetic license?...or is it poetic licence...ugh..

Thomas

Lavender

Lavender

8 months 1 week ago

Hello, Thomas,

Hmm... there doesn't seem to be one solitary answer for this, so maybe poetic license? Ugh is right! :)
Thank you!
L

mark

mark

8 months 1 week ago

The problem with it is

To command his language as he, you must be able to do as he. Then you may be considered a licensed alike IMO.
Otherwise...well, not many people can, and do it fluently.
[eveilish grin]
Teehee
I for one am a phony (I admit) and have made the mistake of trying.
I have only seen it done by one guy (in 20 years) !
Mark

Triskelion

Triskelion

8 months ago

...aaah...

...the problem with it's!
...'tis the problem for thee 'til we agree.
not thou, not me..
Regards till then, for thine is glee!

Cheers!
Thomas

mark

mark

8 months ago

We tried Sonnet here a few times

but not in a long time now.
It didn't go over well.
For the longest time most just wanted to spill.
But lately things are getting better.
Maybe we need to give it a go, maybe it's time.
We'll see,
Mark

Lavender

Lavender

8 months ago

Ah, The Sonnet!

Probably my most favorite structure which I dearly love to practice and pen. I gave it a whirl on 2.13.24 titled "Valentine" and a handful both before and since. I would love to see the sonnet explored! Always something to study with that beautiful style. Much to love and learn!
L

mark

mark

8 months ago

Heads Up

We will be asking the membership to write a Sonnet to Neopoet. This will be a contest and the winnner will not only win 50 dollars but also be the first poem (first page) in our anthology. So, polish up your pens and start thinking about your Sonnet to Neopoet.

Mark and the Cabinet