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brittle light

Nov 06, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Rehabilitation Of A Fundamentalist

there is a monastary
in the woods
no one lives there

the forest had obliterated the sky
and as if "no sky" meant "no God",
all the monks fled.

running to the churches and
cathedrals of the city,
only to find themselves skyless again,

they ran to the desert where it all began,
and finally learned
..."too much sky can be oppressive to Man"....

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Region, Country: upstate New York USA, USA

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14 years 8 months ago

Brittle,

Brittle,

"..."too much sky can be oppresive to Man"...."

Loved this ending, and I cannot deny that you may be correct.

--oppressive-- two s's

Really enjoyed this piece . . .!

Victor

14 years 8 months ago

hey, Victor

thanks. I very much appreciate your feedback and am glad you enjoyed!

thanks for the spelling correction....you guys are beter than spell check!

14 years 8 months ago

this reads so smoothly

trying to see why -
and i think it is the rhyme, nicely hidden but pulling the reader along at the correct pace

interesting write
i really like it al
love judy
xxxx

14 years 8 months ago

Al

LMAO
Now THIS is good poetry.

D

14 years 8 months ago

Very great write, it made me

Very great write, it made me think of Khalil Gibran, with a beautiful and very clever last line.

"Too much sky can be oppressive to man"

You're very talented, John

S

14 years 8 months ago

rehab

I take this to be a write on the need to strike a balance. Neither too much nor too little sky. Had a fable type feel to it. P.S. I liked it lol.....scribbler