RELEASE ME

From the pangs of human existence
show me the path to the real paradise
if only you have seen one

Lead me away from this life so calamitous
to the cauldron of
salvation

just relieve me
if you know what
silently I mean
nay
then forget it

About This Poem

Last Few Words: These words are directed towards the KNOW-ALLs

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

Comments

Candlewitch

3 years 2 months ago

dear lovedly,

oh no...you sound a bit angry, but mostly hurt!!! send me a private message and talk it over with me. and I hope you will feel better with someone to talk to and be heard.

*many hugs, Cat

p.s.

I really liked these lines:

Lead me away from this life so calamitous
to the cauldron of
salvation

lovedly

3 years 2 months ago

You take me so literally
These few words cam to my mind in my dreams
based on many of my poems
so I composed to draw one's emotions
I succeded Cats
don't you think
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxThis is last night's composed some day /////what do you say?
WAIT FOR TOMORROW
I shall return at dawn
will travel in the wings of the cool breeze
fetch tonnes of free happiness
smiles and laughters
all in store
like dates cakes
and pineapples from a store
but mine will be as fresh as thee
smile please
happiness is me
as I come
you will say
Lovely poem
are ye
happiness is me
welcome we

Candlewitch

3 years 2 months ago

yes you got me!!!

I was so very worried about YOU!!!

*hugs, Cat

lovedly

3 years 2 months ago

Thanks Cats

for your concern now this poem has two comments
'twill stay
read my comments on
NAILED
and keep it unveiled
the same way
Hope you will help
sweep the floor

Jackweb

3 years 2 months ago

A spill of rage

This piece is emotionally charged. In life when good things are not coming forth, our good dreams, we seem to blast the adverse situation we are in.

The poetess began with a rhetorical question:

"From the pangs of human existence
show me the path to the real paradise
if only you have seen one".

A brave and well written expression. Dismal melancholy thought.

The line that touched me:
"Lead me away from this life so calamitous
to the cauldron of
salvation"

Jackweb

3 years 2 months ago

A spill of rage

This piece is emotionally charged. In life when good things are not coming forth, our good dreams, we seem to blast the adverse situation we are in. From the title of the poem, there's a call of freedom and plea!

The poetess began with a rhetorical question:

"From the pangs of human existence
show me the path to the real paradise
if only you have seen one".

A brave and well written expression. Dismal melancholy thought.

The line that touched me:
"Lead me away from this life so calamitous
to the cauldron of
salvation"