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Remembrance
Retracing the past
where dear memories bloomed
as moments shared
filled with colours of love,
friendship and innocence
The best years of my life
are in my youth
when my body is filled
with more vigor
and the heart is fresh
with hope and dreams
for the future
I wonder about old friends
who once stood by my side.
Its long since we have parted.
Each of us, finding our own paths
to embrace our ambitions.
I hoped our paths will meet
for it felt as if our reunion
has been long-overdued
Sighing, I faced the sky
sending my prayers
and well wishes to the wind
for the friends I have lost
through time
yet always there
in my mind
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Seren
11 years 1 month ago
Alid
Your starting to let the artist in the poet out, your starting to paint your world for us, I am loving watching your growth....well done
love and hugs Jayne xxx
alidzain
11 years 1 month ago
Dearest Jayne
I owe it to people like you. Each time I feel like I want to stop writing all I have to do is read your works and revive that old dream and I started to write again. Anyway I'm glad you like this one. Thanks for the visit.
Alid
loved
11 years 1 month ago
good and sad
good and sad
you have not remembered me
am i now out of sight
do say so
I am a simple poet
you and all know
off the cuff
i compose
and let you aalllll
in the garbage bin of time
dispose
some repose
I now suppose
hankering again eh!
if Jess sees it
read it and then I will delete it
Jess is coming
go see out of the window
leave the door ajar
we will know
when he is not far..
but do never forget me
alidzain
11 years 1 month ago
me forget you?
if you are a simple poet then what am I? nah, you're good. I'm still the amateur here. LOL.
Alid
Ian.T
11 years 1 month ago
Alid
One that we have been waiting for.
Good words, careful thoughts, and a great theme.
Welcome to another level,
Yours Ian.T
alidzain
11 years 1 month ago
Thank you, Ian
Let's hope that I can keep this up shall we?
Alid