"A Return to Eden"

like a teenager's bedroom and what is sometimes found and then dismayed over. Some just delve into that darkness thinking it will be a brief journey and for the strong it is but too many do not see the complexities. This is way deeper as you read it more than once.

Any here can tell you I am no expert at free form. All I can do is tell you how I would change it if it were mine. Please note that places where spaces are suggested are to punctuate changes in line of thought. Now since you asked for it lol:
L-2 try lining dark alleys
L-4 try inner recesses of these shadows
L-5 change shades to prisms
L-6 change little to tiny
L-7 delete and
put space between L-10 and L-11
L-15 change taken to inhaled
add space after L-15
L-16 change far to dim
L-17 change piercing to pierce
space between L-17 and L-18
L-22 try paradise based on lies
L-23 change in to of
L-24 change nobbed to numbed By the way, what are nobbed fingers?
L-25 and 26 combine to something like :
shared experiences spreading death

all of these are just alternatives to be used or discarded as you see fit.........stan

You just took me down memory lane on a trip to my youth (Young adulthood). I was once a resident here, but came through this phase of my life by the skin of my teeth. I woke up one day, took a look around me and realized I didn't like what I was becoming and got out. My first husband wasn't so lucky in his addiction. I had to leave him as he was complacent to this way of life and refused to consider change. I've seen first hand the damage of the life style and know the end results as I lost good friends to aids and overdoses. Your poem is dead on accurate and I applaud you for tackling such a difficult and horrendous subject. Great job!

always, Cat

I must come back to this but I got the whole picture..I shall return. Hard to write for my two fingers numbed out three days now. I will be back.Hit me up if I forget in a pm please

Blessings to you
Mona
xo's