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Mar 05, 2025
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Returning
I'm returning
to what I can be.
I'm heading
in the right direction.
It is easy to see,
to feel.
Progress
is a wonderful word.
I love it.
I'm making it
every day.
It is not becoming
what I used to be.
That's gone.
I'm a different person.
I'm making different decisions.
It's better
than what I had before
because I am growing.
What I had
was wonderful.
I had a person
who supported me.
Now,
by myself,
I need to be strong
and far more powerful.
The good news
for me
is how hard
I am working
on this.
I have taken all the help
I could be given.
I leaned on
many people,
some of them,
my family,
others
more professional
in nature.
That help
made me feel better,
more able to move forward.
The peace
and serenity
I have sought
is coming.
I am feeling it
every day.
Here I am,
in the moment,
opening up
in this poem.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Post November 2024, the starting point of my mental improvement, I can feel and see just how much progress I have made. This poem , four months later, reflects this.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
4 months 1 week ago
Neopoet AI - version 2.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Your poem "Returning" conveys a strong sense of personal growth and empowerment. The repetition of phrases like "I'm making it every day" and "I am feeling it every day" emphasizes the ongoing progress and positive changes you are experiencing. The contrast between your past and present self is effectively portrayed through lines such as "I'm a different person" and "I need to be strong and far more powerful."
One suggestion for improvement would be to consider varying the structure of your stanzas to create more visual interest and flow. Experimenting with different line lengths or stanza breaks could enhance the overall rhythm and impact of your poem. Additionally, you might want to explore incorporating more vivid imagery or sensory details to further engage the reader and bring your experiences to life.
Overall, your poem effectively captures the theme of personal transformation and resilience. Keep exploring different poetic techniques and refining your language to deepen the emotional resonance of your work.
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