A RHYKU

South born rain washes the night
tomorrow's forecast : clear and cold
I sit here beneath a dim light
as year and I both become old

About This Poem

Last Few Words: title suggestion welcome

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Comments

Rula

12 years 10 months ago

hello Stan

No critique . I thought it is a well done piece.Really creative!

scribbler

12 years 10 months ago

Hi Rula

I'm pleased you enjoyed this write and form................stan

weirdelf

12 years 10 months ago

Elegant.

and subtly profound

scribbler

12 years 10 months ago

Hi Jess

Brevity in words with maximum conveyence is part of what I aimed for when I developed this form. Thanks for taking the time to read and leave kind evaluation...............stan

Ian.T

12 years 10 months ago

Stan

To age is to feel the past
The more past you feel the older you are
Step into the future with a love
And I am not going to suggest any
Great piece of writing there lol
Yours Ian.Txxx

scribbler

12 years 10 months ago

Greetings Ian

Thank you, I'm pleased you enjoyed it...............stan