A RHYKU

South born rain washes the night
tomorrow's forecast : clear and cold
I sit here beneath a dim light
as year and I both become old

About This Poem

Last Few Words: title suggestion welcome

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Comments

Rula

12 years 7 months ago

hello Stan

No critique . I thought it is a well done piece.Really creative!

scribbler

12 years 7 months ago

Hi Rula

I'm pleased you enjoyed this write and form................stan

weirdelf

12 years 7 months ago

Elegant.

and subtly profound

scribbler

12 years 7 months ago

Hi Jess

Brevity in words with maximum conveyence is part of what I aimed for when I developed this form. Thanks for taking the time to read and leave kind evaluation...............stan

Ian.T

12 years 7 months ago

Stan

To age is to feel the past
The more past you feel the older you are
Step into the future with a love
And I am not going to suggest any
Great piece of writing there lol
Yours Ian.Txxx

scribbler

12 years 7 months ago

Greetings Ian

Thank you, I'm pleased you enjoyed it...............stan