c lynn brooks

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Ride The High Wind

Falling
stumbling
through the darkness
of another sleepless night
emotions seeping into
all I attempt to write

Silence surrounding
solitude abounding
engulfs me where
none is what it seems
passions ride the high wind

Grasping
Clutching
tendrils of the forgotten
await on the precipice
of one conscience thought

Binding
reminding
reality breaks a heart
yet still
passions ride the high wind
tearing me apart

Clutching
touching
the mist of journey's
end

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: north carolina usa, USA

Favorite Poets: Leonard Cohen, Edgar Alan Poe, ray Bradbury, John Grissom, .Alan S Jeeves James patterson,

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Comments

Rula

5 years 1 month ago

Dear Chrys

I like how you've structured this piece though the second stanza has a bit deviated than the others. I have to admit though I read it more than twice and still feel there's a lot need to grasp.
Engulf...should it be engulfs or I am missing something?

Shall make sure to see what others have to say.

c lynn brooks

5 years 1 month ago

Rula

should be engulfs thank you
lol I just might reveal the mmeaning when others have commented on it
thank you for taking the time to read
hint: the answer is obvious

Gracy

5 years 1 month ago

Hi lynn, good poem, I only

Hi lynn, good poem, I only think it should be shortened a little by joining some lines together. I think I've said this before...lol.
I take it to mean the isolation you feel during this pandemic. We don't know when it will end. Sad...I've also developed sleep disorders, never had them before.
I'll drop by again. Dare I say "cheer up"?

c lynn brooks

5 years 1 month ago

Gracy

Thanks so much for the visit. When freestyle is written each though has it's own line
lol no has nothing to do with the pandemic
Hint: lets see now , it is about me read deeper into it

Geezer

5 years 1 month ago

Sounds to me...

like there is a need for some companionship. Snow on the roof, but fire in the furnace.. ~ Gee.
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c lynn brooks

5 years 1 month ago

Gee

Perhaps but a little more than that
thanks for the read and trying to guess lol fyi sir gee no snow grey

c lynn brooks

5 years 1 month ago

Teddy

and you are always so generous with your compliments
Gee almost had it
think I will wait just a bit longer
no not my muse my muse is always asleep lol

c lynn brooks

5 years 1 month ago

Rula,Gee,Gracy and Teddy

here is what you were patiently waiting for
stanza 1-selff explanatory
2-empty and alone at the same time the passion for life and living is strong
3-the thought of have I forgotten how to give to another
4-wanting to try but afraid of being hurt again
5-I've given up trying

so there you have the why behind the poem

c lynn brooks

5 years 1 month ago

Teddy

Thank you