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LittleGift
LittleGift
Feb 17, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the workshop:

Rhythm and Meter in Poetry

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The Rise and Demise of The Maid of Orléans (For Workshop Rhythm and Meter in Poetry )

A child here heaven does call, - shall be brave
Souls must save, fighter stand tall
By virgin hands English fall

Will of God speaks to a girl - precious youth
Witness truth, her fire unfurl
Almighty wrath she now hurls

Fearless, accepting her fate - sad demise
Spirit rise through holy gate
In heaven trust, angels wait

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Hello, nervously I add my effort for the workshop Rhythm and Meter in Poetry. I hope I have achieved the task given to me. I feel thanks to this workshop, I understand syllables and the effect they have on poetry. It's been fun but VERY hard My theme is a tribute to Joan of Arc, I hope this was kept through the piece. It was quite the challenge Below I have pasted the rules of the challenge so readers have a better understanding of what I am meant to be achieving. The style is to be in ENGLYN PENFYR. It is syllabic and rhymed in nature, as opposed to metered, but the use of internal crossover rhymes lends it a very rhythmic quality. The poem is comprised of three line stanzas, and each line has a rhyming word in the seventh position. A three syllable caesura is added to line #1, which cross-rhymes with the first three syllables of line #2. Many thanks for reading LG

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Cambs, UK

Favorite Poets: I guess my most favourite is the poet that encouraged me to write. Mr Poe himself. He was a poet stricken with grief and someone I could relate to. I use to read him to death. Since then I have read others such as Emily Dickinson and Shelley, to name a couple. But I also get a lot of joy from reading others who write within communities. Poets tend to take us on a journey, I find it insightful when I read others works

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LittleGift

LittleGift

5 years 4 months ago

Hello

Hello Mark, thank you ever so much. I struggled with that line. I wanted to use the word in. But the line then breaks the rules by becoming 8 syllables long. It has to be 7. But I will try a revise that line.

Thanks for reading and the help today

Kind regards

LG

LittleGift

LittleGift

5 years 4 months ago

I changed it

From:

She trusts heaven, angels wait
to:
In heaven trust, angels wait

Is that better or worse ? lol my brain feels a little numb :)

Geezer

Geezer

5 years 4 months ago

I am not...

a part of this workshop, but felt compelled to say that I didn't have to read the author's comments to realize that this was about Joan of Arc! So kudos to you, for writing something so well that it led me to the proper assumption! ~ Geezer.
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LittleGift

LittleGift

5 years 4 months ago

Oh wow

You just made my day :)

Thank you Geezer, I am thrilled it read right. I do like Joan of Arc. So I am beaming you got the theme.

Kind regards

LG

samary

samary

5 years 4 months ago

You have achieved!

Great LG you have the form spot on and for a first EP its really good. Congratulations all that syllable counting worked.
Little point line 3 has 8 syllables but minor issue.
Very well done

LittleGift

LittleGift

5 years 4 months ago

Where is it?

Hello, I keep counting 7 so I am confused. Any chance you can breakdown that line and show me the 8th syllable ? Then I can work on changing that offensive line lol

Thanks ever so much. It was fun to do. Even though hard work
Kind regards
LG

LittleGift

LittleGift

5 years 4 months ago

Gotcha

Oh I was looking at the line before as you said line 3
By virgin hands English fall

But I see it in the line you say. I think I missed the fact I put an “a” in the line. I will change spoken
Thanks ever so much for spotting it, so I can fix it

Kindest regards
LG

samary

samary

5 years 4 months ago

Sorry cant count lol

I have the dreaded flu at the mo with a head like cotton wool. No wonder you couldnt work it out... Sorry for misleading you! Sam

LittleGift

LittleGift

5 years 4 months ago

Get Well Soon

Oh that is awful to hear. I hope you feel better soon, and thanks so much for giving me your time, especially when you feel so poorly

All the best

LG

LittleGift

LittleGift

5 years 4 months ago

Thank you

I worked hard on this and yes very pleased with the finished results. All down to the wonderful teaching and support from Sam and all on here

Many thanks for reading it and glad you liked my theme.

Kindest regards
LG

samary

samary

5 years 4 months ago

Re form

Classical forms are harder work than free verse in you really have to think about word choice but when its right the results can be lovely . Its a good form for your repertoire and learning metre and how we can exploit wirds fir sound and meaning will help all your poetry.

LittleGift

LittleGift

5 years 4 months ago

Thanks

Thanks Samary, it's been a great learning curve. I am looking forward to the rest of the workshop
Many thanks for all your support

Kind regards
LG