Roadkill (eddy styx)

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Roadkill (eddy styx)" presents an intriguing narrative with a surprising twist at the end. The use of imagery is effective in setting the scene and drawing the reader into the narrative. The line "I spied a young man taking pictures of animals that had been killed on the road" is particularly evocative, creating a vivid image that is both unsettling and intriguing.

The sudden shift in tone and subject matter at the end of the poem, with the introduction of the drool, is unexpected and adds an element of surprise. However, it could be argued that this shift is too abrupt and might benefit from a smoother transition or additional context to help the reader understand its significance.

The use of vertical alignment in the word "thread" is visually engaging and adds a unique element to the poem. However, it might be worth considering whether this technique is the most effective way to convey the intended meaning or emotion. If the goal is to emphasize the drool, it might be more impactful to use this technique with that word instead.

The reference to "HER" is somewhat ambiguous. If this ambiguity is intentional, it effectively adds a layer of mystery to the poem. If not, providing more information about this character could help to clarify the narrative and deepen the reader's engagement.

Overall, the poem has a strong narrative and uses effective imagery, but could benefit from clearer transitions and more context to support the shift in tone and subject matter.

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I like the switch from the allegorical poetry through the ambiguity of "Her" to the concrete ending!!

Though, I have Drooolll as a distended drawn out word ( in mi 'ed) too.

A great experiment *Eddy*.

Obi.

Psssst, I'm English. (an old fart too)
I tend to use the word "whilst* as opposed to "while",,
I guess language morphs as we do.

Obi.

Oh, my gosh, Eddy,
Cringe-worthy stuff, here. One of your best.
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your drool is showing! Love it! ~ Geez.
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"Riding in the back seat" as it were, of the wholesale murder and mayhem of the "Middle east". Frankly, they are appalled at the carnage and slaughter of innocents. They have never been just about murder and killing just for the sake of. The recent spate of killing just because one is angry, is something beyond them. They will continue their ways, and always be on the side of those that have been abused. I feel their restlessness, they will be around soon. I'll tell them you were asking. ~ Geez.
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