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Sep 01, 2016
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Romance In The Night
As the song of the crickets greets the night,
a gentle breeze caresses the land
and leaves rustle on trees under moonlight
while a lovers' kiss blooms in romance.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Vivovon
8 years 10 months ago
Mandolins in the moonlight
Well, I still remember "Mandolins in the moonlight."
"As time goes by" " The world will always welcome lovers", some quotes from "Casablanca" (1942).
alidzain
8 years 10 months ago
Vivovon
Thanks for the visit, the read and comment.
Alid
lovedly
8 years 10 months ago
a lover need not wait.... for the moon nor night's cold breeze
a lover need not wait....
for the moon
nor night's cold breeze
his lips at any time
on his lover's lips
can freeze
ask any lover
if you please
love is no ailment
nor disease
it only helps one
love increase
alidzain
8 years 10 months ago
loved
good one.
Alid
lovedly
8 years 10 months ago
yes thanks
but if you read my Father one
you will say
better well done
alidzain
8 years 10 months ago
Thanks, Mark
Now it sounds better.
Alid