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Romanian Lover
Through the garden path I walked
She sat astride the bench
Quiet, silent and cute,
Her pretty pet so mute
I walked unknowingly
Then rested on the opposite side
On an isolated branch of a tree.
As I closed my eyes in reverie,
She came alongside
And calmly sat beside
Without any fear
As she smiled.
Wow such a beautiful face,
A sweet virginous smile,
Fair and cute,
I queried from where she hailed
She softly replied, Romania.
My eyes once again did close
I was about to dose,
She blushingly smiled again
Took my leave
Slowly strode away
Down the street
Oh! What a treat,
My eyes embraced,
She was really so very sweet
But all that I now remember
Is her lovely eye staring at me
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Rough draft
Critiques
Tim
14 years 10 months ago
A beautiful moment in time
A beautiful moment in time captured so beautifully!
Nice one,
Tim
loved
14 years 10 months ago
Very few people here appreciate beauty
Very few people here appreciate beauty
And
I am so glad you do,
Life is a series of such small strings
and
The discernible eyes can only view,
What is beauty?
and
What love is?
How so ever captured temporarily
By those few, like you.
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