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RUDE LITTLE BOY

Look at that boy over there
running about in underwear
all he does is yell and shout
throwing insults all about

Expecting EVERYTHING to go his way
and Always wants the final say
if he doesn't he throws a fit
he'll hold his breath,stomp feet, and spit

Any wonder other children frown
turn their backs, cast their eyes down
when they see him coming their way
ready to disrupt their play ?

See all the kids on the play ground
happy groups scattered all around
save one little boy whose rude ways
keep him alone on most days

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

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About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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S

scribbler

14 years 4 months ago

LOL

the little boy is now to old to be spanked........at least as a form of punishment lol............stan

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

14 years 4 months ago

Dear Stan,

I know a little boy who has acted like this since he was a toddler. I don't think he has ever had a spanking in his life, just a few time outs. I cringe whenever he is around. Sadly, he is a part of my extended family, so I see him fairly often.

love, Cat

S

scribbler

14 years 4 months ago

hello

I know what you mean. And these little boys become "men" who still act the same...............stan