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Aug 17, 2014
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Russia and Ukraine
Russian separatists
Bombs bursting in Ukraine
Plane shot down from the skies
Ukrainians shudder, brace up for war.
Convoy of humanitarian aid
Ukrainians dismayed, draw suspicions
Since when, do enemies offer aid to their victims.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
10 years 11 months ago
Barbara
"Since when enemies offer aid to their victims"
This is how it goes these days, ha?
We have an Arabic proverb, but I don't know if it has any equivelant. It says "kill him they walk in his funeral". Very weird world, isn't it?
I thought this one can make use of morphing for a more effective impact on the reader, but don't ask me how :)
Thanks for sharing dear.
Barbara Writes
10 years 11 months ago
Rula
Yes it certainly is . Weird. I live if somebody tell me how to mask it morph lol
China Blue
10 years 11 months ago
Barbara
perhaps if you added something like
since when "do" etc
it would complete the sentence
Barbara Writes
10 years 11 months ago
Chrys
Thanks I'll do that.
Barbara Writes
10 years 11 months ago
Hi is this
I made to changes. Do it morph or work better.
China Blue
10 years 11 months ago
Yes
That feels better (at least tto me) lol
thanks for listening