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Dec 25, 2013
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s u b p e o n i c i o u s
dark nay drawn blank
thick as the ice against a bank
i remember colors heavy and droll
and that wind light with cirrus like
winters collar neath a hood
soft stoll
decoratorhipship
decorum factum
while a river of purpose
spreads like a stain
on the ancient stretch
an open world
seeping translucent
speed
a happiness
indifference
you and i were
once upon
its time
a scene of a crime
collusion
like a starburst
blare
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
11 years 6 months ago
Steve
A story within a story with a title that is a google first again.
This is one way to advertise your works.
I liked the wording of the second stanza it had a beauty of its own.
That you and I were once upon its time completed its implication.
Take care out there,
Yours Ian.T
mand
11 years 6 months ago
After seeing Ian's comment I
After seeing Ian's comment I googled your title and sure enough your poem was at the top of the list!
What a lovely poem this is. lavish with imagery - I agree with Ian about the second stanza and I love the phrase a starburst blare!
Love Mand xxxxxx