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Sad life

Moon asks me question while I am sitting silent,
where is she whom you used to talk with,
I still remain silent,
Where is she whom you walked with...

I said listen to my sad story,
there was a girl whom I used to love more than else along,
But now I usually cry all night long,
For whom I did day and night together,
it was my bad luck if she left me something is went wrong,
If she can't remember me in her happiness,
Might remember me in her sadness,
What happened if there is no name of me in her sweet talks,
But might use my name is her bad talks,
I got addicted to her,
I can't forget about her...

It's all about faith who played really well,
Now she doesn't even show her face,
I'm living with her dreams,
And she couldn't remember me,
All I got to say I got addicted to her,
I can't forget about her...

When I hear her name,
my eyes get watery,
From the day you left,
I started writing poetry,
Come back to your Schrey,
he can't live with you,
All he wants to say he can't forget about you...

About This Poem

Last Few Words: After so long I've written I don't know how it will appear to you. Anyways thank u.

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About the Author

Region, Country: West midlands, GBR

Favorite Poets: My favorite poet is no one. I like Shakespeare because his poetry leaves some good message.

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