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Candlewitch

Feb 10, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Saints Don't Suicide (LYRICS by: eddy styx)

I know the words I've heard the song
thing is I'm too far down to care
don't want to listen to the music
when I can't sing along
open my mouth and children stare

just a ghost without a voice
a solitary man who made a choice

took the long road
maybe the wrong road
was turned back at the gate
shame and regret, I couldn’t hide
because Saints don't suicide...

Hey son you're a disgrace
go back to earth and take your place
among the rest of the faceless masses
in this dog eat dog world life there’s no free passes

Hey son you’re a disgrace
go back to earth and take your place
if you want to die young you have to earn it
seen your record…think maybe you should burn it

broken and twisted once more
a man so alone; loss of dignity and pride
don't want to listen to the music
as I stumble amongst the poor
no place safe for me to survive

just a ghost without a voice
a man who made a choice

took the long road
maybe the wrong road
was turned back at the gate
guilt and remorse, I couldn’t hide
because Saints don't suicide…
…Saints just don’t suicide!

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more.

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Comments

2 years 5 months ago

This is amazing

Such powerful lyrics! I cannot love this enough! The title and content go hand in hand. Absolutely fantastic.

2 years 5 months ago

dear Rose Black,

I take it you have had some thoughts take you down this dark avenue? this is kind of my stop-gap. I'm glad you liked it. I much enjoyed your response/comment. thank you very much!

*ever, eddy

2 years 5 months ago

Unfortunately

I have and this poem resonates with me and those thoughts.

2 years 5 months ago

dear Carrie,

I hope they have passed, as I, for one am so glad you are here with us!

*ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat

2 years 5 months ago

Saints Don't Suicide

The pathos of this is amazing. The poem evokes a depth of understanding of the value and or ones judgement of what is important in life.

I really liked the poem although it left me a little sad.

Poets Hand
Hannah

2 years 5 months ago

dear Hannah,

sorry to have caused you any distress. I was just feeling a little maudlin at the moment. thank you for reading and responding.

*ever eddy styx

2 years 5 months ago

sad poems

Poems that can change emotions in the reader are truly potent

2 years 5 months ago

dear Hannah,

your saying that...you have no idea how much that means to me, thank you so very much.

*ever eddy
*hugs, Cat

2 years 5 months ago

Hi Candlewitch

Jayne said to check you and Eddy out. This was the first one I found.

Heart-rending write. I am new to Neopoet and I am just feeling my way round.

This is a amazing bit of writing.

LD

2 years 5 months ago

dear LD,

Jayne is a very special Lady! I must thank her for directing you my way! welcome to Neopoet, we are very glad to meet you! thank you for taking the time to read my poem!

*ever, eddy styx
*hugs, Cat

2 years 5 months ago

Dearest Sis

This is a masterpiece I absolutely adore this. Tell Eddy he's a genius ;)

I wish you could see my face im wrapped. It's that good!!!.

These parts are my favourite!!! You know I rarely pick out part of a poem I love but here are my favourite lines. You know my history and it resonated something in me deeply.

Hey son you’re a disgrace
go back to earth and take your place
if you want to die young you have to earn it
seen your record…think maybe you should burn it

broken and twisted once more
a man so alone; loss of dignity and pride
don't want to listen to the music
as I stumble amongst the poor
no place safe for me to survive

just a ghost without a voice
a man who made a choice

Bellissimo Bella!!!

Much love Always Sis xox

2 years 5 months ago

dear poetic one,

may I also call you Sis? I am a fan of your poetry! thanks for your nod of approval and the extremely kind things you have said. I very much appreciate it.
* thanks, eddy
dear Sis,
you made his day!!!
love you, Lilbug, Cat

2 years 5 months ago

Dearest Eddy

I've been a fan for a long time it would be an honour to be called Sis.

You know I don't ever say anything I don't mean. Gets me in the Poo sometimes but I say it how I see it or read it in this case. You've outdone yourself Eddy!!!

Much love Always Sis xox

2 years 5 months ago

;)

many smiles, Sis!
thanks, eddy

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 5 months ago

Ok

Sorry I’m really behind. I’m recording a song for the wife and it needs to be finished to acceptable standard by Tuesday for Valentine’s. See he’s a saint because they beheaded him for ministering underground Christians. I believe you can go see his skull in the Vatican.

So, you’ve got verse, pre chorus, chorus, bridge for 2 stanzas, verse, pre chorus, chorus.

It’s structured enough. Absolutely. I am pretty swamped with my recording syllabus. I’m not sure if I can get to this any time soon but I’ll keep the words hanging around the studio maybe something just happens.

Nice job,
Tim

2 years 5 months ago

thanks Tim,

I have had help with it through the stream, so I do not take all the credit. thanks for reading. I wanted to know what you thought of it.

*ever, eddy