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Sam + Emma

true lovers with style and class
don’t need to be kicked up the arse
they tangle sometimes
and they share all their crimes
so the rings will be silver not brass

About This Poem

Last Few Words: for my Cousins wedding

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New Zealand, NZL

Favorite Poets: Leonard Cohen, Morrissey, Jonny Cash

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brittle light

brittle light

10 years 6 months ago

cool enough, but

cool enough, but grammatically, I think "there" should be "their"
I could be wrong thuouwgh ass I gess at this kinds a stuf all times: I don't know stufff good
so double checker me: better you do

I'm an idiot sometimes!

BettyBuff

BettyBuff

10 years 6 months ago

Fun write

Hi Simon,

Not been on here in ages and you're a newbie as far as I'm concerned. Liked the write and was thinking it could be applied to my daughter Rachel & Will who have just moved in together after graduating Uni...young lovers....poor kids, just starting out on their journeys.

Ellie

Esker

Esker

10 years 6 months ago

silver..

brass were tools and keys.a softer more heavier constitute
well mixed for alloys
silver was and is still a commercial trade good
even rings....my sterling at the pawn and hock
brings me cash and luck

a short and lively poem

Thank You!

Simon Smythe

Simon Smythe

10 years 6 months ago

yes

I was hoping the leap could be made from brass ring at brass knuckles.
sterling may be worth less to some but I like it more than gold.

thanks for the kindness

weirdelf

weirdelf

8 years 6 months ago

nor hardened steel bracelets

You certainly have a dab hand to the limerick, young man.
It can be so powerful when used a droit ou au sinistere ou jolie.