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Sardonic Smile
Eerie
bone chilling
mesmerizing the unwilling
evil lives within that smile
ensnaring all
with disdainful guile
Seeking out the weakened ones
lurking till the rise of sun
stalking his prey
with resolute stare
the stench of blood fills the air
Acidulous words fall from sneering lips
nails like talons
at each gnarled finger tip
Gnome
twisted figure
casting shadows into the night
A remnant of a man
under the dim lamplight
waiting
biding the forbidden
lascivious dreams he will be living
squandering immortality
with thought so dark and vile
and e're he will be wearing
that cruel sardonic smile
About This Poem
Last Few Words: An introduction to Damien Stryyker
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
c lynn brooks
5 years ago
teddy
thank you I'm glad that got across
Geezer
5 years ago
Damien...
sounds like a very, very bad man. The rhyming scheme is great in the beginning and I wish that it had continued all the way through. The rhythm stumbles a bit, but not badly. In any case, Damien seems like a really bad, bad dude. ~ Gee.
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c lynn brooks
5 years ago
Gee
thanks much I really wasn't going for rhyme at all it just happened
Geezer
5 years ago
Rhyme just happens...
ask me, I know. LoL. ~ Gee.
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c lynn brooks
5 years ago
Teddy
thank you so much and I have eliminated one the( "the)