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scaling ivory veils
Secrets remain shrouded, unspoken,
yet I see them seep
into the spaces between breaths.
Truth, as it stands,
refuses the grasp of words—
it thrives in the moments
we dare not recount.
The echo of vanity
envelops everything I once chased,
leaving me at odds
with the reflection staring back.
Comfort is fleeting, or perhaps,
it never truly existed for me.
I hold to the notion they told me—
that truth is what we shape it to be.
Still, my hands shake beneath its weight,
knowing life demands haste
while the sun glares against unmown hay.
Time always slips through fingers I’d thought steady.
Where truth dares to illuminate,
I blink against its harsh light, recoiling,
as concealment breeds its own sanctuary.
The lies, given ivory form,
pierce me again and again.
Each wound bares a history
I could barely recount,
yet I trace its edges
when silence falls—remembering.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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2 months 1 week ago
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Frederick Kesner
2 months 1 week ago
watching and waiting as the
watching and waiting as the space widens... to the point of hilarity it would seem... a month of Sundays at best.... but we all do try... thanks for all that you do or are unable to perform...
Frederick Kesner
2 months 1 week ago
not feasible, yet again... we
not feasible, yet again... we must gain new ground and expand our horizons or we shall shrink back and implode.... :)
Geezer
2 months 1 week ago
While we...
are reflecting on our reflections,
the truth ducks when we look in its' direction.
And we dare to throw aside the curtain,
when we won't ever be believed.
~ Geez.
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Frederick Kesner
2 months 1 week ago
so true Geez... :)
so true Geez... :)