Season's Cycle... (Loop poetry)

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively uses the loop poetry format, where the last word of each line becomes the first word of the next. This technique creates a sense of continuity and cyclical movement, which aligns well with the theme of changing seasons.

However, the poem could benefit from more concrete imagery. While there are references to color and the passing of time, these are quite abstract. Including more specific details about the sights, sounds, and feelings associated with each season could help to create a more immersive experience for the reader.

The rhythm of the poem is somewhat inconsistent, which can disrupt the flow of the reading. For example, the second line has more syllables than the others, which can make it feel out of place. Adjusting the syllable count to be more consistent across lines could improve the rhythm.

The use of the word 'lively' in the third line is a bit confusing. It's not clear whether this is describing the colors or the act of crawling. Clarifying this could help to improve the overall clarity of the poem.

Finally, the use of the phrase 'more vivid hue' in the last line is somewhat redundant, as 'vivid' was already used to describe the hues in the third line. Using a different descriptor could help to avoid repetition and add more variety to the poem's language.

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Hello Rula. Very evocative piece. I would take out the word 'where' in the third line so there can be a nice pause after 'colours' (spelt as we Brits would spell it. Hehe!). You would need a comma there, in fact you need several commas particularly where a word repeats itself. A couple of full stops would not come amiss either. Sorry, I really like this piece but you know punctuation is my hobby horse. Alex.

I found your poem very refreshing. I love Autumn's colours and the crisp breezes that blow the leaves! I think you have captured it very well... so, this is Loop Poetry, I think I shall try it sometime!

much love, Candle (Cat)

Hello Rula. I can imagine AI rading this in a Robbie the Robot tone. Does it read well?, Yes it does. The second line may have more syllables but the words still flow. His comments on 'lively' could be valid but I think you mean the colours are lively. Alex.

Perhaps get rid of 'more vivid' and replace with 'shimmering'. Alex

I had no idea, thank you for introducing me to something new. I like the premise, and I think that it could become a popular method of poetry around here. Nicely done, ~ Geez.
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