Neopoet

Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Michael Anthony
Michael Anthony
Jan 08, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Second Date

At the annual run in The City,
tortillas were pelting everyone, an eccentric tradition
Your Batgirl costume was unexpected

At the end of the course
bands were setting up on stage
With so many people around us,
our disguises were elsewhere
by then, no longer needed

About This Poem

Last Few Words: The Bay-to-Breakers race in SF is an annual event. Well, it was before the pandemic, anayway.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

This user supports Neopoet so it can be free to all

More from this author

Comments

Lavender

Lavender

2 years 6 months ago

Second Date

Hi, Michael,
I looked up the Bay-to-Breakers Race - extreme fun! Have a blast if you go this year! So...quite the second date. :) Can't help but wonder what the third date was like, or if you remain forever on the second. This makes me smile.
Thank you,
L

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 6 months ago

LOL!

I'll second Lavender on this! I'll bet you are still together!
love the poem, Michael.

*hugs, Cat

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 6 months ago

Michael,

does that make you Batman? way cool! LOL!

*hugs, Cat

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 6 months ago

Sweet

I hope there have been many more dates since this one. I’ll check out the event for certain. I can tell by the way you write that this person (your partner) is very special to you. This matter of fact recollection of a tender memory is exactly the type of stuff a romantic like myself is drawn too.

Tim