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Second title less poem (title shop)
i am not a painter, I am a poet.
Why? I think I would rather be
painter, but I am not. Well,
For instance, Mike Goldberg
is starting painting, I drop in.
"sit down and have a drink."he
says. I drink, we drink.I look
up. "You have sardines in it."
"yes, it needed something there."
"Oh." I go and the days go by
and I drop in again. The painting
is going on, and I go, and the days
go by. I drop in.Where's 'Sardines?"
All that's left is just
letters. "It was too much."Mike says.
But me? One day I am thinking of
a color: orange.I write a line
about orange.Pretty soon it is a
whole page of words, not lines.
Then another page. There should be
so much more, not of orange, of
words, of how terrible orange is
and life. Days go by.It is even in
prose. I am a real poet. My poem
is finished an I haven't mentioned
orange yet. It's twelve poems, I call
it ORANGES. And one day in a gallery
I see Mike's painting, called Sardines.
By Frank O'Hara
About This Poem
Last Few Words: OK. This time I will post my suggested title Last instead of first so get to scratching your heads lol
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
scribbler
4 years 12 months ago
I think this is an interesting poem too.
It's not so much what it says as what it infers . "smell of orange paint" that's also interesting
Geezer
4 years 12 months ago
Personally...
I like the title; "The Orange Sardines". Thinking of sardines and how they disappeared, I was struck by the way your poem was about oranges, but they never appeared until you were finished and used them for the title. The sardines were prominent until the painting was finished and then they disappeared. The two thoughts combined to make "Orange Sardines"! ~ Geez.
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scribbler
4 years 12 months ago
LOL
Not too sure I'd like orange sardines.,,,,,,,,,,.........
scribbler
4 years 12 months ago
Well....
They might be alright along side green eggs and ham.................
Rula
4 years 12 months ago
My title
"Sardines In The Galary"
Just trying to add some fun to the whole thing.I wanted to give the reader some food for thought and some fun too.
scribbler
4 years 12 months ago
Hi Rula
Hopefully somebody took the sardines out of the gallery before they turned bad lol
Obadiah Grey
4 years 12 months ago
Firstly, and lastly, A
Firstly, and lastly, A wonderful, wonderful poem!
"Sardinian skies"
Obi.
scribbler
4 years 12 months ago
Hi Obadiah
That is good twist.
Lavender
4 years 12 months ago
Hello!
I would call it: The Process. Both forms of art started in one place, and evolved into something else.
Thanks!
L
scribbler
4 years 12 months ago
Hi Lavender
It Does have a lot to do about process
scribbler
4 years 12 months ago
As simple title
for a complex poem
scribbler
4 years 12 months ago
OK here's my title :
Time, Sardines and Oranges. I'll give ya'll the poet's title this evening in case somebody else want to weigh in
scribbler
4 years 12 months ago
Here's the title
"WHY I AM NOT A PAINTER"