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Sep 03, 2023
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Seeing Red
You, the fire, immersed in burning it all
with the heat of a blue-white flame
aimed at my good intentions.
There was no comfort there.
Where love was sought
I found wolves at the door.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Remebering a red-haired girl from a long time ago...
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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
RoseBlack
1 year 10 months ago
Short and Powerful
There was a lot of emotion in these two stanzas as well as descriptive language. I am sensing you reached out to someone only to have them greet you harshly and not at all in the way you expected. This resonates. Well done.
Michael Anthony
1 year 10 months ago
Thanks for stopping by RB and
Thanks for stopping by RB and sharing your thoughts. Yes, this was memory from a fairly toxic relationship years ago. Wished her well and we both moved on. For myself, much for the better. Her? I have no idea...